This is just a brief post.
Today I gave up on Scrivener. I have loved that program for so long, but it stopped working on my Windows 7 machine for reasons unknown and the support was less than helpful. So I used it on an ancient laptop to export my draft novel into MS Word and there it shall remain.
These things said, I have been experimenting with writing style. This is me playing around with a new opening and I would like feedback from you folks as to whether or not it is too “purple” or too familiar. What would you change?
Cello and fiddle throbbed the Green House, tumultuous and passionate like lusty lovers in a storm. Verdant hummed along with the music as he tiptoed past dozing guards, pausing only to tut at their ineptitude. Well, that was a bit unfair. Eldritch magic guarded this place and the guardsâ€™ principal purpose was to protect him should the magic fail. They would not imagine for a moment that he would seek to escape their protection. But Verdant was a cantankerous and wilful old man and such are always a pain in the arse to those about them.
â€˜Speak to us. We can sense you,â€™ whispered the first tombstone as the old man passed it. The Green House and its din was now at his back.
â€˜Shush you,â€™ scolded Verdant, worried some inadvertently attentive guard might hear.
â€˜Speak! Speak!â€™ chorused several other of the giant stones. They really were a nuisance.